As I drive past that ironic sign, I grasp the fact that I'm here and for one reason only, to find out the truth. But I never thought it would be this cold here.
I drive up into my Aunt Renee's driveway and I'm suprised but what I see. Trees, Bushes and no sign of a single soul. It suprises me how isolated and alone they are. I park the car and as I stood outside, I took a look at the house and it was breath-taking. As if I jumped into an episode of the MTV cribs. Hesitantly making my way to the porch, I knock on the front door and patiently wait. Turning around I admire the view and the fresh air that I seem to cant get enough of. Suddenly I hear the door behind me open and I turn. There stood my Aunt Renee. Beautiful brown hair that reached just below her shoulders, her big brown eyes, just like dad's and a smile that made you feel at home. "Elena? Elena Gilbert? What on earth are you doing here darling?" She reaches out for a long and embracing hug. "Hi Aunt Renee." I smile. "Um I decided to take your offer and come visit you here. Sorry for not calling first, I wanted to suprise you." Suprise you? Really Elena. Poor Aunt, little did she know I was only eager to come to ask questions, I totally forgot to call first. "Ah nonsense Elena your family. Come inside, you must be exhausted!"
We walk inside, and immediatly it feels like I entered Oprah's home. I imagine it would be something similar. Long glass windows, polished floors which are mirror-like, magnificent art on the walls painted by God knows who, breath taking interior and exterior designs that match like twins. Im in awe of it all. I wonder why dad never let me come here? Following beside my Aunt Renee, we arrive at the living room where my cousins Edward and Alice gathered. I take a look around, trying to familiarize myself with them and only after a second we exchange hugs and small talk. During dinner, we all tell stories about what's happened over the years we havent seen eachother. I enjoy them. They're company. I've missed this feeling of family, and being together. A wonderful vibe is in the air and we're all enjoying one anothers presence. Then Edward asks "So Elena, what brings you here? We all know your not here for small talk?" He was right. I wasn't. I'm on a mission. " Haha, you're right Ed." I look at everyone. "I'm here because I want to know the truth. I know that my parents accident WAS NO accident. So I came here in hopes that someone knows something, that I dont."
The room quickly goes quiet and they all look at one another as if they were keeping something from me. "Elena, your parent's passed away in a car accident. It wasnt anyone's fault. Maybe it was just an accident?" What? "It wasnt an accident! You know my dad was always careful when he was driving. There had to be something that had happe.."
*KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK*
Such loud knocks inturupt the tense conversation, but who could that be at this time of night? They all look at one another again, worried this time. As if they we're expecting someone. Aunt Renee stands and smiles at us all, "I'll get it." She leaves and the room is dead silent, only hearing Aunt Renee's footsteps. We all hear the door open. And suddenly a mans voice yells out,
"SHES HERE ISN'T SHE? DONT YOU DARE LIE TO ME! I HAVE A RIGHT TO SEE HER!"
As thats going on, the three of us sit at the table quiet and still, then in a split second a brown man stands at the doorway and stares right at me. I stare back but wondering who is this guy? And why does he want to see me so bad? Renee quickly chases after him and tells him to leave. Alice grabs me and pulls me towards the other room. Without breaking contact with the strange brown man staring at me, I yell out "What's going on? Who are you?" He stares right at me and doesn't say a word. He smiles at me, as if he knew me.
"You have your mothers eyes." Huh?
"Did you know my mother?" I ask in a demanding tone. "Who are you?"
Renee grabs his arm "Don't do this Billy." Billy, looks right at Renee. "How could you? How could you be so selfish. Everyone knows the truth, except her."
I jump in, "A right to know what?.. Would someone please tell me whats going on??"
The room is dead silent, and the strange man speaks. "I'm your father Elena."
"WHAT?" I couldnt believe what this man was saying? Is this a sick joke? I stare at him, then to my Aunt Renee. She doesnt seem to deny his bold words claiming to be my father. "Is this true?" My voice shakes. Aunt Renee seemed so shattered as if someone had just stolen the life right out of her.
"Yes Elena, its true."
to be continued.
Hi Christine,
ReplyDeleteGreat job! Your introduction is succinct and keeps the reader engaged and wanting to read more. This is great overall, though you might want to do a final spellcheck as there are a few minor spelling and grammar errors. For example in the first paragraph it says "Ah nonsense Elena your family." In this case it should say "you're." There are only a few minor errors though and they don't hinder communication too much. I like the way you tied both The Vampire Diaries and Twilight together, everything seemed to meld together very nicely.
Christine, your fan fiction is great because I feel like reading more. I think you reflect the personalities of the characters very well. Just like Shonnell, I noticed a few minor mistakes such as happe instead of happen etc. Well done.
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